1. he described his event very well. everything he wrote made perfect sense.
2  he could use better dialogue.
3  he used great metaphors in his narrative
4  how he has stayed friends with his teammates his whole life and plans to keep on staying friends with them.

1. My narrative does an ok job of involving the reader.
2.  My narrative does a good job of relating events in sequence.  I did get all of the things i did in order of what happened
3.  I need to put in more feelings and sounds in my narrative
4.  There are no conflicts or any tension in my narrative
5.  My narrative is written from my point of view
6.  Does not focus on the connection between past and present
7.  Does not make a point yet. I still need to do that.

1.  I enjoy some english classes. I enjoy reading i dont like to write.
2.  i like jokes, sci-fi, and songs
3 sci-fi jokes songs comics
4  research papers
5   c
6 i dont enjoy discussions i dont like to talk that much.
7  i listen
8 football and lacrosse
9  i went to mad river and it was fun
10  no
11  none

Helen Keller Narrative

Answer the following:
1. What did you think of this narrative?
2. What was most interesting or engaging about it?
3. What surprised you?
4. Did this change your outlook on Helen Keller at all? Why or why not?
5. Copy and paste three examples of vivid detail and imagery that helped enhance the story
6. How can a narrative be more engaging than something like a biography? Why is it important to get someone's personal perspective?
7. Make a bulltted lists of some things you could write a narrative about


1. I thought this narriative was very imformative about Helen Keller.  I did not know much about her before, but after reading this i learned a lot.

2.  The most interesting thing in the narrative was how Helen Keller learned words from Anne Sullivan by writing them on her hand.

3.  What surprised me was how fast Helen picked up the words and how she never quit learning new words. 

4. This did change my outlook on her because i always thought that she would give up on trying to learn words and other things, but she never did and i thought that was really cool and brave of her. 

5.  Have you ever been at sea in a dense fog, when it seemed as if a tangible white darkness shut you in, and the great ship, tense and anxious, groped her way toward the shore with plummet and sounding-line, and you waited with beating heart for something to happen?

As the cool stream gushed over one hand she spelled into the other the word water, first slowly, then rapidly.

In the still, dark world in which I lived there was no strong sentiment or tenderness.

6.  It is important to get someones personal perspective because it allows the reader to see how the narartor feels in the story.

7. something that has effected your life
   personal experience
   a trip you took that you liked
  

where i m from

I am from cold winters,
From the early morenings and 45 minute drives.
I am from Mad River and packed lunches.
I am from excited, fast, and steep runs.
I am from the bunny hills and the double blacks.
From being six and scared to an adult and confident.
I am from colorado and vail.
From family and friends. 

I am from sandy beaches and 10 hour drives.
I am from grandparents and uncles, parents and brothers.
From boogie boarding every day.
I am from playing tripole and ucher.
From deep sea fishing and catching the big one.
I am from watching fireworks on the fourth of july.
From playing with sparklers and eating homemade apple pie.

I am from lacrosse and football
from long hot practices and dirty luandry.
I am from going undefeated in lacrosse
to beating Upper Arlington in football.
I am from watching film and dirty locker rooms
i am from going to bed at nine o'clock
to wakeing up at six in the morening.